Siblings, games and poetry.
This poem came out of bits and scraps that lay in my head. I cannot tell if it makes sense but maybe you can. Either way, I believe in every word I’ve written in this poem. They’re pieces of me, after all. I hope you like the poem! Do tell me in the comments section below. Enjoy and keep smiling 🙂
My sister believed that life is
like a buzz wire game.
You remember that game where you
guided one wire looped around another
from (a) to (b)
and would get zapped every time they touched?
She thought that was life.
She was the first wire,
an infinity looped around the length of this world
and every mistake was a zap.
When a boy broke her heart,
she cut her skin (zap).
When she had an amazing meal,
her wide smile mirrored the serving plate.
An unwanted job and weird boss
at 30,
her eyes wrinkled (zap).
She had beautiful analogies.
I believe that life is
like a poem with odd rhyme schemes.
Our childhood rhymed perfectly,
that weird (ab)(ab) perfect,
teenage years looked like limericks
and it got crazier with time.
Humans do things that only half make sense.
We hide shattered mirrors in our chest
and lost pathways in our head
We come up with choices
like sleep or the 4 a.m. dawn
and we have weird things
like coffee cups that taste like heartbreaks
and pens that resemble swords.
I have a few concepts myself.
She always said:
we’re all broken
more than ever before.
But someday we’ll make it to the end of the wire.
And I believe our poems will end too.
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Makes perfect sense to me. In between life stages we grow. From childhood games to adults in the game of life. It was chaotic, just like life. Well done.
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Thank you! You have new meaning to the poem. Very grateful 🙂
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You’re welcome.
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This poem is very raw, I think we all have been through those stages where we once sharing everything with our siblings to going back to our cocoon stage, where we only show the best pieces and hide the broken ones from the world. I think we all hope to reach from a to b in the end😊 I wish it was bit longer 😊 Beautiful 👌
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Thank you for reading! If it were any longer, I would’ve gone crazy writing it. I was a mess when I was writing this.
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I get you, sometimes writing long is tough when the topic is too close to heart 😊
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Very deep, Utsav. Makes perfect sense. Your sense of the world shows through as sublime. Beautiful perspective, just sometimes painful.
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Thank you!
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Beautifully done. —CC
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Thank you!
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Isn’t as impressive as your other works. And considering I am in awe of your works, I think you could do better. Yes, there was a concept you were trying to put forth, but I felt it lacked your style, some essential essence was missing 😦 waiting for you to deliver better like you usually deliver yourself
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I’ll try harder next time! I don’t have a style as such, because I try my best not to develop one, but I will try to write much better pieces 🙂
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I like that you take in feedback 🙂 by style I meant your originaltiy, please give us more of that, for I’m sure every follower and reader loves your works.
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Of course I take in feedback. The reader is the most important part of the writing.
I do know you meant my originality. I keep trying to shake things up. That’s my attempt as an artist 🙂
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Looking forward to more from you!
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You’ve put this beautifully and I equally loved the artwork too.
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Thank you! Artwork credits to the artist. 🙂
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..we are all broken in someway. I was just musing on that. I get your sister. I loved this. Beautiful.
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Thank you for reading!
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Seems like our journey from childhood to adulthood. A life without responsibilities and tension. Really missing my childhood with my siblings. Awesome
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Thank you for reading, beautiful.
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Excellent imagery and analogy. I might suggest cutting some of the extraneous language out to tighten this piece up.
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Thank you for the suggestion. Means a lot. I’ll go through and do my best in don’t just that!
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It makes perfect sense. In fact, this is actually pretty awesome…. beautiful and deep all in the right ways!
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Thank you!
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Your poem makes me sad. I do like the line, “We hide shattered mirrors in our chest
and lost pathways in our head” – I think this is true of all humans, especially as we age. Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you for reading!
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This is beautiful and makes complete sense to me. Absolutely lovely. Thank You and Cheers! 🙂
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Thank you and cheers!
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My pleasure! 🙂
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Did you do the painting by yourself…
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I did not. I’m awful at painting. I got it from some amazing artist on Google.
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Your way of writing is awesome.. Specially the ones you have written in your Instagram (Abu’s story).. Keep writing….
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Thank you Judy!
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Oh, wow. Wow, wow, wow. So beautiful, so haunting. You have moved me to tears. ❤
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Means more to me than you can imagine. Thank you!
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It is so beautiful. I especially like the sound effect of zap at the end of some lines. This is one poem I would enjoy reading in a book!
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Thank you for this.
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Thank you!
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Beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you for reading, beautiful.
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Amazing ….. Flows beautifully. Happy you shared!
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This is a truly beautiful poem, and it pulled me in at the first line. I love your use of (Zap). Thank you ❤
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thank you myspirals
Great postings
Good luck
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nice work
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Glad you liked it.
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Cute!
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Thank you 🙂
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This was powerful and real and raw. I enjoyed it on a very personal level.
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I’m glad you did 🙂 thank you for reading.
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So beautiful and moving! Thank you for sharing!!
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Thank you for reading!
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Anytime!💞
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❤️😋
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This reminds me of so much of my childhood, just amazing 🌾
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Thank you for reading ❤️
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Great write! keep it up. 🙂
-Renee Verona
rarityofparadise.com
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In a word – brilliant.
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